Audience: We showed this version of the rough cut to members of our A2 media class (all aged 17/18years old). This is an ideal audience to show the rough cut to because it fits within our primary target audience for the music video of 15-24year olds. Also for this early rough cut we showed it to adults at home who fit within the secondary audience category of original Robbie Williams followers.
Rough cut 1 feedback
- Start- mantel piece, photo album (flicking through, touching a photograph) don't reveal that person, condolence card, wedding invite
- Shakiness - slow down - baking scene
- Nathan grab Katies bum- needs to be quicker
- Pink spoon and bowl tongue
- Match cuts to link
- Josh's hands to wavy in driving bit
- driving- cross cut between the 3 scenes (make new doc to show before and after - youtube annotation tool- do not have to be long)
- Painting- space needs to be sped up
- Boy smiling painting at robbies high note
- child had blonde hair - hair changes as people are growing up so it doesn't necessarily have to been the same because in normal life it changes colour all the time
- get audience feedback from people who don't know the idea to see if it makes sense
- Don't keep 3 scenes, mix it up, less structure
- cut youngest kids to high notes? find specific parts of the track to match with it
- Trade shots into background of main scene, low opacity
- More shots of hug at the train> 360 degree angle? layering
- Oldest dinner, darker/sadder bit of the song
- Candle flames/fire flames
- film some frost on the ground - match with duvet
- Better ending
- dont always show the face
- More performance of robbie singing
- pace can be slow in places
- Film performance ASAP
- Transitions need to be a lot smoother
- Need performance footage
- Fade into one another to signify them growing up
View the rough cut 1 here
embed vid!!!
ReplyDeletealso, with EvalQ3 in mind, using annotation tool for 1 or more draft would be v useful for both R+P/Eval marks [UseICT, Pres'n]