ALL- Digipak middle draft

GM - Rough Cut 6 Feedback

Audience: We showed this version of the rough cut to members of our A2 media class (all aged 17/18years old). This is an ideal audience to show the rough cut to because it fits within our primary target audience for the music video of 15-24year olds. Our teacher also gave us some feedback on this version of our music video and he in in keeping with our secondary target audience. 

• check the frame size is consistent throughout (do first walking it?)
• check lipsyncing lines up fully
• (0.21s) 'we were free' layering - playful footage
• Robbie walking up the steps - random. Only use once. first shot too short?
• Break performance up - window <3 shot?
• some shakiness which needs to be edited out or deleted
• (1.11s) drum - edit to the beat
• (1.21s) frame boys face better, get rid of girls hand from the corner
• also crossfade with the following shot
• motion tab - ask for help? 100% in point, 0% out point?
• split 2 shot up where licking the spoon - add robbie
• shakes whilst licking lips - delete
• phone shot is too random, doesn't fit
• space in the sky and train - link phone in on a layer

This is something that we tried however we felt that the original sequence ran better with the remainder of the video.

• blowing out the candles - put where the track really slows down and almost stops
• end - use the candle being blown out rather than the light being turned off
• layer kids on concrete for CU of feet at station
• (2.10-2.11s) shakes
• (2.13-2.14s) edit to the beat when percussion comes in
• flare effects
• 'flying' something knocked over/being thrown
• train set - link with the older gen on the train
• train set - big shake - slow down more to solve?
• oldest gen - hands on bum - creepy? takes away from the mood of the song
• not innocent (take out)
• dancing gen1 layer with Josh gen 2 - multiple layers 3or4 - resize and reposition them
• speed up dancing ^
• whale 'looks like hes having a sexual encounter with the carpet' - either delete or layer the same shot over and over again
• layer the girls face over the rocks during performance shots
• in bed together - not innocent - wear pjs
• more shot variety for the Robbie performance shots
• fill in gaps
• Freezeframe kiss at the begining - to remove the shake
• Move 3 shot up screen
• Your smiling- zoom to smile - set in point/out point
• Robbie performance after train-cuts away too fast
• Split screen on drum beat
• More MC shots,enfatic body language cu of Robbie
• Freeze frames/split screens

ALL - Rough Cut 6

For this rough cut we have changed it from the last one. Some of the things altered include:

• Extreme long take of Jack at the begining cut down slightly
• She's the one: focus on girls
• First two performance shots cut down
• Layer performance
• Jack agaisnt the lampost, c/u of  boy and girl either side
• flying: slow down, ghosting effect (trailing), animated zoom
• more multiple layer
• More shot variation
• Split screen - (1,2,3,4), pop up one by one
• Jack sat on rocks: more shots of it, to break up performance, jumping off the rock-flying

JT - Rough Cut 5 feedback

Audience: We showed this version of the rough cut to members of our A2 media class (all aged 17/18years old). This is an ideal audience to show the rough cut to because it fits within our primary target audience for the music video of 15-24year olds. 

• Extreme long take of Jack at the begining, zoom in, cut to a shot of him walking, it doesnt have to be lip syncing
• She's the one: focus on girls, split screen?
• First two performance shots, on screen far too long and too much
• second performance: fade to black, cross disolve?
• Fade to black into instrumental section
• Layer performance
• Jack agaisnt the lampost, do it to the beat, use empty half, c/u of singers face or boy and girl either side
• Kids on too long eating cake mixture
• greater variation of robbie
• flying: slow down, ghosting effect (trailing), animated zoom
• Blowing out candles, what comes next, zooming into candle
• more multiple layer
• More shot variation
• Split screen - (1,2,3,4), pop up one by one
• link all candles
• Jack sat on rocks: more shots of it, to break up performance, jumping off the rock-flying
• look through all Jacks footage, see if we can get any to break up the video
• Jack on rocks, on too long
• pace and variation

GM - Digipak draft 4

During the creation of this we happened to be researching one more aspect of Robbie and found that on his Greatest Hit albums there is normally around 19 tracks listed whereas on ours there was only 10. After seeing this for the next draft we have added some more songs to the tracklisting. We also realised that a convention of a digipak is on the DVD to have exclusive gig footage whereas the Live at Knebworth that we chose was released as a DVD on its own. Because of this we have found a new exclusive performance session and changed it to this instead. We showed this to our teacher who is part of our secondary audience and an original follower of Robbie Williams, remembering his time in Take That and when he first launched his solo career.

New back cover:

We have also created a spine for the digipak.

This is the first draft of the middle panels we have.